kittylover0991 Posted March 13, 2006 Group: Royal Member Followers: 1 Topic Count: 490 Topics Per Day: 0.07 Content Count: 2,726 Content Per Day: 0.37 Reputation: 5 Days Won: 0 Joined: 05/06/2004 Status: Offline Birthday: 02/25/1990 Share Posted March 13, 2006 Hey everyone, This is just a small poem that I wrote somehow before and after church last night. For about three years, I have been writing things of a different sort... my youth pastor(kinda joking) had opened up his bible to me and said "Here, let me tell you about a friend of mine. His name's Jesus Christ." "Do you have the joy that comes from the Lord?" Tehe... well... In other words, I used to write things that well, were of the dark(?), things that were depressing, and eventually, a romantic comedy(two chapter story) that went all wrong.. my eigth grade teacher told me it was pornagraphy. So, well, I have a friend of mine at my school, who is a Christian, and he said, "Well, you don't always have to write dead depressing things. You can write about happy things, what God has done for you." I know that that is what God has been trying to get me to do all along. Why I am posting this here, I am still unsure. It's very personal. Honestly, I think it stinks because I am used to writing things like "My Heart once shut door" "In a dark room".. well.. etc... anyways, I will stop talking now, and all I ask is that ya'll read this and just tell me what you think.. It will be much appreciated. Mind you, this is my first one of this nature, so I ask that you please forgive me if it sounds really bad... ok..um.. thankyou... ~Crystal Continually searching in an everlasting abyss Continually searching to fill emptiness Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nebula Posted March 13, 2006 Group: Royal Member Followers: 10 Topic Count: 5,823 Topics Per Day: 0.75 Content Count: 45,870 Content Per Day: 5.95 Reputation: 1,897 Days Won: 83 Joined: 03/22/2003 Status: Offline Birthday: 11/19/1970 Share Posted March 13, 2006 Doing good! It's a good reminder that even us "religious folk" need to repent from time to time. BTW, you might want to fix this typo: "Yeah, what a food I was to endulge in sin" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MrLuke Posted March 13, 2006 Group: Senior Member Followers: 1 Topic Count: 58 Topics Per Day: 0.01 Content Count: 628 Content Per Day: 0.09 Reputation: 0 Days Won: 0 Joined: 04/07/2004 Status: Offline Birthday: 01/09/1985 Share Posted March 13, 2006 That's great! Really good Can still see some of that 'dark' in there, but that's not a bad thing since you lead up towards a very bright ending! Something which all people will be able to relate to on some level and those that haven't got past the darkness, it can give hope to that there is a light at the end of the tunnel, as it were! Good job! Should post it in the seekers lounge area. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kittylover0991 Posted March 13, 2006 Group: Royal Member Followers: 1 Topic Count: 490 Topics Per Day: 0.07 Content Count: 2,726 Content Per Day: 0.37 Reputation: 5 Days Won: 0 Joined: 05/06/2004 Status: Offline Birthday: 02/25/1990 Author Share Posted March 13, 2006 LOL, thankyou Hey neb, thanks for pointing out the error.. my mom showed me that one this morning before my doctor's appointment... It seems that various people notice various mistakes(correcting them as I go along) Thankyou Luke, In the seekers lounge?.. um.. ok... *goes to look for the seeker's lounge* Thankyou both of you for your words.. they are a great encouragement... The "dark" in there kind of comes from my past.. if this wasn't obvious(I hope it was...)... When I went to church, I was what hte bible calls a "double-minded" man.. and in some sinces, I still am. However, I now act the same way at church as I do out in the world. There are definitly areas that I need to work on, but this was a hard shell to break... Jesus is just so amazing, and I want to glorify him in what I write.. although it takes me forever to find the words. My english teacher still hasnt gotten over "I am the existence of nothing, the emptiness of vanity. I am from sorrow and hate, I am the essence of death" So.. thankyou all so much and I look forward to see what else the Lord has in store... With sisterly love in Christ, Crystal Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kittylover0991 Posted March 13, 2006 Group: Royal Member Followers: 1 Topic Count: 490 Topics Per Day: 0.07 Content Count: 2,726 Content Per Day: 0.37 Reputation: 5 Days Won: 0 Joined: 05/06/2004 Status: Offline Birthday: 02/25/1990 Author Share Posted March 13, 2006 That's great! Really good Can still see some of that 'dark' in there, but that's not a bad thing since you lead up towards a very bright ending! Something which all people will be able to relate to on some level and those that haven't got past the darkness, it can give hope to that there is a light at the end of the tunnel, as it were! Good job! Should post it in the seekers lounge area. Hey um.. I just tried and it won't let me post in the Seeker's Lounge. Turns out only unregistered guests can post there... thankyou for the idea though.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bolts Posted March 14, 2006 Group: Diamond Member Followers: 1 Topic Count: 50 Topics Per Day: 0.01 Content Count: 963 Content Per Day: 0.14 Reputation: 4 Days Won: 0 Joined: 10/27/2005 Status: Offline Birthday: 07/10/1963 Share Posted March 14, 2006 Kitty Honey!! you are a bundle of joy - well done!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cmariebright Posted March 20, 2006 Group: Members Followers: 1 Topic Count: 1 Topics Per Day: 0.00 Content Count: 10 Content Per Day: 0.00 Reputation: 0 Days Won: 0 Joined: 02/12/2006 Status: Offline Birthday: 01/24/1980 Share Posted March 20, 2006 I thought you poem was very good. Thanks for sharing....cms Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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